Tuesday, August 19, 2014

The Ghost Of Young Nick's Head

~The ghost of young Nicks Head~

Joe and Eddie were sitting by a fire on a cold wet day. They tried to count all the soot that would come from the fire. When the power went out,they both jumped out of their seats as thunder and lightning began. Goosebumps ran down Joe’s back. Then they sat back down, BOOM another bit of lightning struck! AH Eddie screamed in fear, he had a big fear of lightning he didn't mind the thunder


Are you ok? Joe and Joe’s dad both asked at the same time. Yes I’m fine thanks, just got a little fright. Lets go have a look in the hallway maybe we can find something to use as a light Joe said to Eddie and his dad. Brrr, as they walked out of the warm room they all felt a chill down their spine, what is that shape in front of us? Joe said and it's even moving.


As Eddie lead the way the night started to fall so it got darker and darker eventually it was so dark that they couldn't see what they were doing or where they were walking. But lucky for the boys Joe’s dad took a tour of the house and remembered the way that they were going and he could see a little bit of light coming from the large window and he new that they were getting close to the front door.   

As they got even closer Joe could see the moving shape again but he didn't say anything. So they kept walking and then suddenly Eddie screamed, are you OK Eddie? Joe’s dad said and Eddie was on the floor. Yes I’m ok just my head kind of hurts, do you think you will be OK Eddie? asked Joe yea I think so. They had a look on what Eddie tripped on and it was…

The old flea bag scratching himself in the middle of the hall, what a silly dog. So they carried on looking around for some light. {“KNOCK”KNOCK”} they all heard a knock on the front door, they all stepped back at the same time a waited to see if they could hear the knocking again. {“KNOCK”KNOCK”}

"Who is it?" Joe’s dad said shivering in fair. “I have something for you” someone said beyond the crack through the front door.


To Be Continued...

 




7 comments:

  1. I'm so happy to see you have published this on your blog, Crystal! It is wonderful writing. You kept me hooked the entire time. I especially like how you are painting a picture for the reader with descriptive and emotive language. Well done!

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  2. wow that is an awesome story and I hope we get to finish it

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  3. Amazing work Crystal. That's awesome that you have left it at, someone said beyond the crack through the front door. Keep up the fantastic work.

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  4. Wow Crystal!
    What a long story.
    I like the line " AH Eddie screamed in fear, he had a big fear of lightning he didn't mind the thunder.
    Very funny ,I like how you stoped the story where we stoped at.
    Luckily Miss Eglinton is going to read the end of the story for us, And you should write about the end of the story too!
    Tu Meke work at this story Crystal!
    Keep up all the long blog posts :)

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  5. No wonder you're called Crystal, your writing really sparkles ;)

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  6. Fantastic retelling, Crystal. Your writing does sparkle! What a compliment from the author! I hope there is a part 2!

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  7. awesome blog post crystal

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